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@ 2011-03-06 – 21:46:36
Echoes and endings...
Don't put your daughter on the stage ...
Be free, and fare thou well:
please you draw near...
We'll hang ourselves tomorrow.
Unless Godot comes...
Eliza? Where the devil are my slippers?
We're free and clear.
We're free. We're free...We're free...
M.Brenton (with help from Noel Coward, William Shakespeare, Samuel Beckett,Lerner and Loewe and Arthur Miller.
6th March 2011 in response to a @onestoppoetry picture prompt photograph by Jacob F. Lucas.
Reminds me of the cruelty of stage moms, alongside cool lit allusions.
banana
Pro Every line is a last line except for the central Godot quote which underlined the desperation of the pressured actresses. The 'found' lines seemed to have a nice touch of finality and fatalism to echo the sad fate of the theatre.
I just read your comment on OSP site (which was held in WordPress moderation). Interesting creative intent to your piece—using last lines does provide an echoing tone of finality in many ways.
banana
Pro I hoped it would. I like to try and experiment now and then - sometimes it comes off and sometimes not.
Good, focused, effective work.
banana
Pro Thanks. I read yours and learned something new today. Working out how to best share my newfound knowledge with hubby. I expect I'll some up with something 
nicely played putting all those together to form a coherent picture...i get the same impression...my wife was a ballerina and saw what she put herself through...
banana
Pro Thanks Brian. I like yours too. I am very keen on short poems, I like a concentrated dose that packs a punch and then lingers on long afterwards. Your poem is an example of something I was trying to express in this poem -
http://poems-2-share.blog.co.uk/2009/11/17/novpad-17-bright-sparks-7402268/
Again how compactly taking from the scripts of others to reform, restage, create something entirely new with those messages worked into the result. Well done! Gay
The most poignant line for me in in a film is from, somewhat comically, the first Pirates of the Carribean film,
"Now bring me that horizon."
It captures so perfectly the chance of escape from the mundane day to day world and one where adventure might just be a possibility.
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